We go to the "girls' living room - night." The twelve pages are mostly intact except for minor rephrasing and a few small surprises. In this script, Shirley's middle name is spelled "Wilhomena," which would change by at least the time they join the Army. And the name of Laverne's junior prom date cousin was "Angie," rather than "Vito," like on air.
Interestingly, Squiggy's line about the "nice quiet orgy" was originally, "Yeah. We got some classy women upstairs. They think we live in a dive," so this is the opposite of the removal of all the "orgy" lines in the "German" script. And of course Squiggy's line about "losing his lust" was added, I'm going to guess by Lander.
Most surprisingly, the scene and act then ended with Laverne yelling out the window, "Shirley Feeney has got all my money!", rather than the perfect "Shirley Feeney don't stuff socks in her bra! (PAUSE) Anymore!"
Unlike the "Porcupine" script, by this point they seemed to have been on the right track, and so it's not surprising that so much of this scene made it in, just with a bit of polishing. The lines are sharper and funnier and the plotting less pointlessly meandering.
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