Saturday, May 28, 2022

"Short on Time," Scenes L and M

We're at the apartment again, somehow "minutes later," which doesn't make any sense, because, for one thing, Laverne has changed back to her waitress uniform, and for another, even if she drove, how could she get from the auditorium back home, especially considering Los Angeles traffic?

They dropped Frank saying that Chuckie got the phone number of the waitress at the coffee shop, because "he's a real operator."  And they omitted the last part of the scene, after the DeFazios hug:

FRANK GOES TOWARD THE DOOR AND HE TURNS TOWARD LAVERNE.

FRANK
Listen, Muffin, maybe I can start getting used to this alone business tomorrow.  But for tonight, is it all right if I sleep on your couch?

LAVERNE
I got a better idea.  Why don't you sleep in my bed and I'll take the couch?

FRANK
That is a better idea, thanks.

LAVERNE
Okay, Pop.  But if there's anything you need, just let me know.

FRANK
There is one thing.  Can I borrow ten bucks?...  I owe the monkey some money from Gin Rummy.

LAVERNE GIVES HIM A "LOOK."

LAVERNE
Gin Rummy?  Wow, Chuckie really is smart.

FRANK
He ain't that smart.  He only beat me two out of three.

LAVERNE
Pop, look at this tally sheet.  He killed you...

FRANK
He was keepin' score.  He cheated.  Look.  He don't even know how to add.  Seven and six is thirteen.

LAVERNE SHOOTS HIM A LOOK, AS WE:

FADE OUT.

In the tag at Cowboy Bill's, in the "evening," Frank was supposed to be carrying "several boards and a hammer.  On one of the boards is written, 'Women, go home.' "  And then after Mary exits to the kitchen (rather than outside, as in the filmed version), Frank "dumps the boards on a customer's table" and says, "Here.  Souvenir."  Otherwise, no changes.

A few thoughts:
  • With Chuckie knowing about women and getting the waitress's number, he seems like a real swinger in this episode.  (You're welcome.)
  • Frank is a little more vulnerable in this version, although of course they have to undercut that by making him more stupid than a chimp.
  • Despite the long gap until the airdate, this script is remarkably close to the later version.  I would like to see a much earlier version, and find out if Edna's departure was handled any better, or worse.  Also, I wonder if they planned to combine all these odd threads together from the first, or if they later threw everything into the stew and hoped for the best.

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